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dose this sound good so far? its based on doom 3

The Union Aerospace Corporation is the largest corporate entity in existence originally focused on weapon and defiance contracts but new ventures have expanded into Biological research space exploration and other scientific endeavors with unlimited funds and the ability to engage in research out side of moral and legal obligations the UAC has the most advanced technology ever conceived鈥?

With this said the story could start. It goes like this鈥 young man by the name of Jeffrey Nadole applied for a job as a security guard in Delta Labs for the UAC he got the job a week later and had to take a shuttle to UAC鈥橲 city on Mars on March 7 2145 wile he was on board he over heard two men talking to each other he heard 鈥淚鈥檓 sick and tired of running damage control every time he makes a mess鈥?鈥測a鈥ou鈥檙e the control and if that fails I鈥檓 the damage鈥?鈥渋f that鈥檚 what it takes Betruger is going to start doing things are way鈥?come to find out that was Coinsures Elliot Swan and his body guard a few hours latter he got off the shuttle and checked in at the security check point and was checked for alcohol guns and any disease he passed and checked in at reception were he was given a PDA (Personal Data Assistant) and a pistol after that he reported to Sergeant Kelly Were he was given his objective which was to find a missing scientist that was last seen in delta labs so Jeffery went off looking for the scientist when he came to the the Delta Labs main processing center he found a young chine鈥檚 gentlemen he seemed quite fumbled and worried Jeffery asked what was wrong the chine鈥檚 gentlemen pressed the play button on the T.V. there was when Jeffery entered DOOM the T.V. showed people screaming, dying, security shooting at monsters, and radios cracking then evil laughing filled the room Sergeant Kelly came over the radio 鈥淲ere under attack by an unknown life form everybody forward to their last known R.P鈥?Jeffery heard some familiar voices he thought trying to think where he heard the voices before then it clicked Coinsures Elliot Swann 鈥淒ang it DR. Betruger why this鈥?鈥渨ell the UAC doesn鈥檛 want to listen to me so they can suffer by the way I like their screams鈥?now Jeffery knew he was behind this the door opened some one shot, Jeffery drew his gun and shot back the zombie fell back dead Jeffery examined the body it was all cold except for the fresh warm blood Jeffery hoped to eventually meet up with Coinsures Elliot Swan Jeffery walked out of the room as he walked down the hall someone jumped out of a room he shot it skimmed Jeffery鈥檚 neck as Jeffery grabbed his neck he shot the zombie strait in the throat he fell dead in his tracks Jeffery crawled over to the dead body and looked at his gun he chuckled and said no wonder it鈥檚 a dang shotgun he picked it up reloaded it and put the pistol in his holster soon he came to a half dead Security Guard he was bleeding all over and was trying to say something Jeffrey crouched down next to him after awhile he figured out what he was trying to say he was trying to say 鈥渒eep going leave me here try to kill DR. Betruger there are a lot of unnatural things in this whole UAC center remember DR. Betruger NEED鈥橲 to be DEAD鈥?鈥渙k I鈥檒l make sure sir鈥欌€?鈥渢he name is Stephan鈥?then he coughed and died Jeffery stood up and saw a gray eight eyed creature it screamed in a very high pitch tone it threw a plasma ball Jeffery ducked and shot the creature twice with the shotgun the creature fell dead and to Jeffery鈥檚 surprise the body disintegrated into red ashes Jeffery checked the Security Guard鈥檚 body again to make sure that he didn鈥檛 just faint but he was dead Jeffery continued down the hall of blood and dead scientist Jeffery new it was a long way home he came back to reception blood was every were on the wall鈥檚 on the desk鈥檚 on the floor and on the ceiling Jeffery threw up it also smelt as bad as it looked he took the service elevator up to the Administration office when he got out of the elevator he heard Swann鈥檚 voice again he was on the digital phone talking to DR. Betruger again 鈥淚鈥檓 telling you DR. this is out of control the UAC is taking over this operation鈥?鈥淥peration is that what their calling it now and its not out of control Swann you are you and your buddy will be taking care of nothing understand鈥?鈥測es DR. I believe I do understand鈥?then he heard his body guards voice 鈥渙k time for plan B鈥?then one of the doors in front of him opened some one shot he shot back and continued walking to the door another one of the plasma creature鈥檚 came out of an office it had blood on its face Jeffery shot it twice again it鈥檚 body disintegrated like before after a day of blood violence and screams of the helpless people DR. Betruger came over Jeffery鈥檚 radio he said 鈥淛effery you are slowly but surely getting On my nerves but soon you shall die and your soul will go strait to hell like the others before Jeffery had a chance to respond he was off the radio Jeffery walked around a corner he saw a dead body